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Public News Post #5857

Thank you for expressing your opinion

Written by: Vera
Date: Saturday, June 24th, 2000
Addressed to: Mak Fawa Gijan, the End Incarnate


I'll have it noted and taken posthaste to the nearest humgii location for processing.
In the meanwhile, I would like to return your kindness and gift of constructive criticism.
To start, please consider that using too many strong words can weaken your message. You may also want to rethink your use of obscenities. They are not highly thought of in the world of criticism.
Second, word repetition can make your writing sound awkward. Perhaps you could find a different word to substitute for "pathetic" in one of the two sentences. "Time" is also used in both. This could be remedied by changing the rather cliche "i've heard in a long time" to something more meaningful.
Absolute statements and poor support can cause you to sound unknowledgeable. Remember to use examples from your subject to give your statements weight and power.
Finally, in response to your post, you are very welcome. However, it's a shame to interrupt your life to put more of your resources into such a terrible waste of time. Sometimes it's better to shake your head and continue your business, leaving the idiots of the world to deal with their own stupidity. After all, if they're that bad, they're probably not intelligent enough to be swayed by the Wisdom of Gijan.
And now, having wasted precious time, I will continue on my pleasantly stupid way and write a second poll. It would be mean to leave you with only one to hate since you are already complaining in the plural.

Penned by my hand on the 6th of Ero, in the year 251 AF.


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Public News Post #5857

Thank you for expressing your opinion

Written by: Vera
Date: Saturday, June 24th, 2000
Addressed to: Mak Fawa Gijan, the End Incarnate


I'll have it noted and taken posthaste to the nearest humgii location for processing.
In the meanwhile, I would like to return your kindness and gift of constructive criticism.
To start, please consider that using too many strong words can weaken your message. You may also want to rethink your use of obscenities. They are not highly thought of in the world of criticism.
Second, word repetition can make your writing sound awkward. Perhaps you could find a different word to substitute for "pathetic" in one of the two sentences. "Time" is also used in both. This could be remedied by changing the rather cliche "i've heard in a long time" to something more meaningful.
Absolute statements and poor support can cause you to sound unknowledgeable. Remember to use examples from your subject to give your statements weight and power.
Finally, in response to your post, you are very welcome. However, it's a shame to interrupt your life to put more of your resources into such a terrible waste of time. Sometimes it's better to shake your head and continue your business, leaving the idiots of the world to deal with their own stupidity. After all, if they're that bad, they're probably not intelligent enough to be swayed by the Wisdom of Gijan.
And now, having wasted precious time, I will continue on my pleasantly stupid way and write a second poll. It would be mean to leave you with only one to hate since you are already complaining in the plural.

Penned by my hand on the 6th of Ero, in the year 251 AF.


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